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Devastating Reductions

Mary shivered on the biopsy chair. The technologist asked if she wanted another blanket. God, no, Mary thought, as she declined the offer, instead, what would be nice; a scar free body and her original 34B, left breast. Twenty minutes into the procedure, Mary flinched – her left breast compressed on the biopsy plate. She promised herself total equanimity and no crying!

“Hey, Doc,” said Mary quivering, “I’m beginning to look like the mountain range behind this hospital. There’s only so many lumpectomy a girl can handle before she…she…”

“Go ahead, Mary, let your tears flow,” the understanding doctor whispered.

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Inspiration: Friday Fictioneers with host, Rochelle Wiseoff-Fields

THE CHALLENGE: Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end.

THE KEY: MAKE. EVERY. WORD. COUNT.

Genre: Contemporary

Photo credit: Danny Bowman

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43 thoughts on “Devastating Reductions

  1. Wandering Voiceless says:

    I’m having some creative challenges with this particular picture, so I asked my daughter to tell me the first word she thought of when she looked at it. She said, “boob” and pointed it out to me. I see you saw something similar. Very nice. :>

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  2. Hala J. says:

    You really made me feel for Mary here…that kind of life is never easy. You definitely took a very different spin on the prompt.

    If I may offer one “fix”, replace “understandable” with “understanding”, because I think the latter is what you meant to say.

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  3. atrm61 says:

    Such a gut wrenching story of a cancer survivor Sun-made me feel very sad cos I remembered my mom who succumbed to this dreaded disease-tho not breast cancer.Very evocatively expressed-bravo!

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    • Sun says:

      on the rare doctor, yes, Bjorn…i thought how rare to have doctors so caring these days. i loved your story with Lot’s wife. awesome.

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    • Sun says:

      a difficult time in a person’s life – dealing with cancer. your Aunt Mary being twice a survivor really is a hero in my eyes. watching someone endure all the treatments really is like watching a soldier going into battle. my cousin (in remission) also battled breast cancer and survived.
      thank you, Brenda. ♥

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