The writing goal for the Carpe Diem Haiku Kai Tanka Shrine series is to create a new Tanka in the same tone, sense and spirit as the featured Japanese poet, Ishikawa Tokuboku.
At first glance, his poem looks like a happy beach scene; however, with a sudden switch in words, we find a grieving person – crying, yet also preoccupied by a crab.
I thought about little children, how easily they can get preoccupied, especially along a beach shoreline. Now what about a good parent who gets distracted for just a few moments…
My Tanka follows the master Tokuboku’s poem.
On the white sand
Of the beach of a small isle
In the Eastern Sea
I, my face streaked with tears,
Am playing with a crab
~ Ishikawa Tokuboku
surfer riding waves
in the blue pacific sea
a child on white sand
plays before father returns
sudden surge takes her home first
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If you would like to add your own Tanka version or simply looking for haiku inspiration, please have a visit at Chevrefeuille’s Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.
Enjoy a few more in this series, Tanka Shrine :
♥ Carpe Diem’s Tanka Shrine, Ishikawa Takuboku’s “on the white sand” (coffeewithyerbuccaneer.wordpress.com)
♥ Carpe Diem Tanka Shrine: On The White Sand (readinpleasure.wordpress.com)
♥ On the White Sand (genesmusings.com)
♥ Lost in the Fog #photography #poetry (moondustwriter.com)