Going Back: On Waka, Komachi and Classical Haiku

An interesting Carpe Diem Goes Back to Its Roots features Waka, or poem style originating from classical Japanese literature.

The goals are to choose a Waka and remodel it into a haiku using the classical syllable rules: three lines with the 5-7-5 syllable line structure. There are other rules that apply; I will leave that up to your curious nature to visit the challenge.

My chosen Waka, written by **Ono no Komachi, is one of the six best Japanese Waka poets from the Heian period, also known for her unusual beauty. Hopefully my haiku meets the rules – it follows the Waka poem.

Komachi’s poems in later years tended to focus on the loss of her former lovers due to aging and the fading away of her physical beauty. Oh, the hardships that comes with ephemeral youthful physical beauty…but her beautiful writing legacy still inspires…

Camille Pissarro,  Impressionism, suicide, abandonment, Waka, haiku,

akikaze ni Because I trusted
au tanomi koso someone who grew tired of me,
kanashikere my life, alas, must be
wa ga mi munashiku as empty as a rice ear
narinu to omoeba blasted by harsh autumn winds.**

the covers been blown,
with vulnerability bared –
bleak wails of winter 

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Inspiration: Carpe Diem Goes Back to Its Roots #3 “waka”

Komachi’s poem source: Simply Haiku | Female Waka Poets: Love Poetry in the Kokinshu

Another Waka to Haiku moment t enjoy → ‘Nothing Gold Can Stay,’ ( Robert Frost ) Waka to Haiku.. (nicolethelocalartist.wordpress.com)


13 thoughts on “Going Back: On Waka, Komachi and Classical Haiku

  1. rommel says:

    She’s like you, Sunshine. Your writing legacy will forever live…. unless your blog crashes. I bet you. If in year 3013 and I’m still alive and kicking, as I’m reading comments in my blog, I’ll visit yours and comment back to see and read your words, and also to find out if you haven’t died of paper cuts. 😀


    • Sun says:

      by the year 3013, Rommel, i foresee you enjoying your blogging adventure so much it will simply be out of this world 😛 and snip-snap…let me not think you let your fingers type such dark omens – like a blog crash and paper cut drama…noooo…. (ha-ha)


  2. atrm61 says:

    This is so beautiful in so many ways Sun-first I loved the way you introduced the theme and the poet and then the waka you chose -I felt like crying-could relate to it so closely and last but not the least ,your awesome haiku-“covers blown”-you said it all my friend in just 3 lines-phenomenal!!


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