Cold Stone Mountain

ligo haibun, stone cold mountain, minighazal, haiku, short haibun fiction, artist's muse

If there is one lesson life should teach, it is never become attached – to an artist. Specifically, an enigma, a painter. One that can caress your face with loving hands while running slow deep Persian blue strokes down the soft ridges of your back – his bare canvas undulating into a First Friday’s downtown art gallery show. Honolulu, in the middle of Chinatown.

The Cold Stone Mountain embraces the bright spotlights
Fangirls come scantily dressed bringing party lights

Good friends warn, “Don’t hold your breath for opening night.”
Sun fails to listen; I fall hard for the starlight

So now, in utter despair, I warn anyone who wants good sound advice; become a painter’s muse only if the risk of falling in love is never a consideration.

sitting alone the
tall bartender pours a drink
a toast to the night

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Written for Līgo Haibun Challenge – Picture Prompt.

Style

Haibun, a form of writing originating from Japan, combining prose and haiku. The challenge this week is to incorporate a minighazal, if possible.

  • Ghazal: From Wikipedia -“…a poetic form consisting of rhyming couplets and a refrain, with each line sharing the same meter.”

This ancient poetic form originates from sixth – century Arabic verse and “traditionally deals with just one subject: love, specifically an illicit and unattainable love.”

  • Minighazal:  As defined by Ligo Haibun – ” … [to see a] connection between…two lines of the ghazal couplet…has the same number of syllables in each line…with the last line rhyming with the first two as a refrain line.”

A bit confusing, I admit, and my first attempt at a minighazal. A tough challenge.

Smiles, laughter & creative inspirations to you. Thanks!

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28 thoughts on “Cold Stone Mountain

  1. nicolethelocalartist says:

    Lovely, really enjoyed reading…lucid and complete, all the forms worked really well together..no clunky joins ( wasn’t aware that the ghazel lines had to have the same amount of syllables, Hey ho !! ) and thanks for your comment.

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    • Sun says:

      Nicole – on the ghazel lines, not sure if the syllable thing is just a Ligo Haibun suggestion or tradition. i should look it up but feeling lazy right now. ha-ha.
      …but i really appreciate your feedback – thanks ☺

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    • Sun says:

      by the way, Nicole, not sure if you know but from my comment page, if i try to hover over your cabinets&curios.wordpress.com link, it shows up as 404 and if i attempt to visit your site it does not happen. not sure why or it’s just me or others having the same problem – but thought i would let you know.

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      • Sun says:

        hmm, i’m not sure, Nicole, but the place i am having the problem is from my comment page. when you leave a comment here, i usually hover over your link to open into your site. i just checked from my notification page and your Gravatar shows up great and your link to your site. it is only from the comment section does the 404 happen.

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      • Sun says:

        it takes some time from Forum but if not, you can ask the Support team as well. not really a biggie. you are accessible from the notification page so that’s good. ☺

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  2. Ye Pirate says:

    A haibun that relates so well to a painting while giving its message. And technically superb. I was really impressed with how the two verses fit so smoothly. In fact technically this is quite flawless. Very nice haibun!

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    • Sun says:

      thank you, Pirate – always appreciate the feedback. thanks for introducing the minighazal – very interesting, the Ghazal poetry style. ☺

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  3. Suzanne says:

    I really like the way you have used my painting to tell your own story about art and art making. That last haiku really got to me. Been there…

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    • Sun says:

      your art creations – beautiful and quite unique, i had a hard time selecting between the two. i love the Asian look with the symbols – nice. thank you so much for sharing Suzanne – you made this a lovely challenge.

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