Ligo Haibun Challenge: Miasmatic Haze

This week, Ligo Haibun Challenge offers two writing prompts: the Monsoon or Haze. Guess which one I went with…

haze in Gurgaon

It seems hopeless. An entire city, dying slowly under an unwanted heavy miasmatic haze. Zoom in. Vagrant couple, aged beyond their years, breathes deep the inescapable poisonous vapor insidiously moving like a living entity. Funny how bad air feels it has all the privilege and rights to own air space. But look, over there. The couple shuffles slowly to the shelter. Overcrowded. Again. An underpaid staff rudely points to another site ten blocks over. Fatigue and very hungry, they continue moving like a couple of Galápagos turtles; worldly possessions carelessly heaped upon their back. It is a yellow hazy nightmare. The woman glances back feeling handcuffed helpless. Her lover struggles daily with his constant hacking, night sweats and fevers. She wonders if the next shelter has food and medicine. If they do, she plans to him slip him her food ration and stay vigilant while he sleeps peacefully by her side.

tuberculosis
obscure lung predator exposed
cough with bloodstain phlegm

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31 thoughts on “Ligo Haibun Challenge: Miasmatic Haze

  1. julespaige says:

    This reminds me of the Islands where Lepers were kept. While not contagious, the disease left disfiguation, which some thought best to be segregated. I read a book or story, where the charactor was able to make visits – and only saw what was in the heart – of her loved one, not the face that some might call ‘monster’.

    Thank you for your visit.

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    • Sunshine says:

      i just watched the movie, Motorcycle Diaries. it also had a scene about lepers being segregated from the general community because of old superstitions and prejudice. sad, but as you mention, when someone acts in sincere love and breaks the traditional way of thinking, the face of the Divine shines forth. thanks ♥

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  2. nightlake says:

    Sunshine, this reminds me so much of the situation in Singapore two weeks ago. We had harmful haze (due to the forest fire in a neighbouring country). Thankfully, it has reduced now. Your narrative is so close to reality and a heartfelt haiku here.

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    • Sunshine says:

      oh, no…hope it was not the same dreaded yellow haze i read about over in Japan. it sounded awful but love the optimism of the people. some took to drawing Anime about the whole thing. ha-ha. ☺

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  3. Steph says:

    Really well done. At times it sounds like stage direction for a screenplay. So visual. And real, unfortunate that part, that there are cities like this, Beijing comes to mind. But how loving the woman is wishing to be vigilant in the care of her partner. Very nice.

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    • Sunshine says:

      It must be difficult keeping a positive outlook living under constant poisonous haze…hope Beijing’s problem is only temporary.
      I tried to imagine being driven to a homeless shelter and could only feel distrust. Thanks, Steph. I enjoyed your visit. 😊

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  4. Penny L Howe says:

    Wow, as Celestine said, very powerful and poignant, Sunshine. Excellent use of words. Very expressive narrative! Strong, but a very well done haibun and haiku! I liked it! 🙂

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  5. Peripatetic Eric says:

    Engrossing, descriptive story definitely evokes emotion and the haiku perfectly tops it off.

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    • Sunshine says:

      thank you so much for your feedback, Pirate. your love for writing and passion about the art of haibun is inspirational. i am very grateful for the opportunity to learn and share here at Ligo Haibun. ♥

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    • Sunshine says:

      Hey, Angelia!! I appreciate the feedback…still learning about the art of writing haibun. I’m coming over to see what you have been up to… Thanks! 😀

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