Cracked…

Copyright: Douglas M. MacIlroy

“Mystic is cracked,” bellowed a jealous filly, Brownie, to the rest of the herd as they walked closer to the fence to observe the white horse.

Jewels gracefully shook her mane to scare off the horseflies. “Nah, I love how Mystic’s perspicacious mind operates. How I wish I thought about lifting up the water hose just to be funny. Observe who gets more apples and more daily brushes. It is Mystic because she expands her thinking away from the ordinary. We should be more like her,” said Jewels.

Suddenly, Mystic mumbled through the hose between her lips, “Hey, guys, want water?”

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Inspiration and Challenge: Friday Fictioneers. Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end.

(No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)

THE KEY: Make every word count.

<—Click to read other exciting entries to this photo prompt. Enjoy & thank you!


©simplycharming2013

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49 thoughts on “Cracked…

    • Sunshine says:

      thanks, Bongo! you would think less words is easier but actually, the brain gets a real workout with these short challenges. i enjoyed your visit. ♥

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    • Sunshine says:

      you just made me chuckle, Rochelle. Jewels probably attended HHA …Harvard Horse Academy. 😀

      I really appreciate you taking the time to read all our stories and sharing your thoughts. Thank YOU. ♥

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    • Sunshine says:

      thank you for noticing the different voices, Sarah…i was hoping to show Brownie and Jewel as opposing personalities. you detected it! i appreciate your thoughts. ♥

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  1. JackieP says:

    these horses talk better then I do! Of course that’s not that hard to do. 🙂 but let’s see them type! ha! great story sunshine!

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    • Sunshine says:

      thank you so much, Trainwhistle. you have me smiling about your vocabulary try out…your 17-year-old may like how it flows off the tongue as you say it. i love saying it. 😀

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    • Sunshine says:

      thank you, Lora. i appreciate your time reading and sharing. i did like how you conveyed Mystic’s feelings about changes. sad we humans have those too…

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  2. munchow says:

    Another great, little story. You really have a grip on writing short short-stories with a twist in the end. This one is just beautiful, as is the picture (even though it’s not yours).

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    • Sunshine says:

      Mystic is a beautiful horse and obviously smart to pick up the water hose. 🙂 thank you for your kind words, Otto. i still have a ways to go with this flash fiction thing…but you bring much encouragement. i truly appreciate it. 🙂

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