Tracking the Journey

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photo copyright rich voza

Deputy John Krebs took one last iPhone photo before boarding an early flight hoping to text it home to his wife.

“You pro or just taking pictures for fun?” laughed a well-built, tattooed man looking out the same window.

“Just tracking the journey, Tony, nothing more.”

In mid-flight, John reflected on Tony’s transfer to a minimum state prison and with good behavior, his opportunity for an early parole.

“Hey, I need to pee,” grinned Tony.

Undoing Tony’s handcuffs, John didn’t expect the fatal bullet from his own gun.

“You almost…freedom, Tony…why?”

“Just tracking my journey, John, nothing more,” snickered Tony.

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Inspiration & Note: Friday Fictioneers and with strict security measures taken at airports today, this scene could only happen in the movies, right? 🙂

THE CHALLENGE: Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)

THE KEY: Make every word count.

Find all the contributors by clicking Links in collection below and for more details on how to participate, please visit lovely host, Rochelle via 8 February 2013.

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40 thoughts on “Tracking the Journey

    • Sunshine says:

      tats are body art for some, perhaps graffiti for others…i’m guessing you’re not a fan. hopefully just a passing cultural phase like long hair during the hippie days. i’m happy you stopped by. ❤

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  1. dmmacilroy says:

    Oh, snap! Loved this story and am immediately curious as to what is going to happen next. plane full of people and a nutcase with a gun and no conscience. Good start to a novel.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    • Sunshine says:

      AngelW…with your imagination & Little Binky, i think you would find the perfect ending! 🙂
      …and you have a peaceful Sunday {{{hugs}}} is it a duck feeding day?

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    • Sunshine says:

      i’m guessing it’s Tony, the hard-core, tattooed character that holding you, TW…he does it every time! maybe one day he will release all his demons and finish his journey properly.
      i appreciate your time ❤

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    • Sunshine says:

      hey, Sarah…i tried to leave the message that follows this over at your Friday Fictioneer post but it kept rejecting my comment. hope you don’t mind, i am posting my comment here…sorry for the inconvenience.
      ***in response to Sarah’s Post: welcome, Sarah! so i take it, this character felt she should have stayed to help in the orphanage but decided to ignore the calling, right? if so, it sounds like she has (young) children still in her care so i would think her first priority is raising her family. in any case, she is doing her duty as a good mom. you did great! ❤

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  2. Anne Orchard says:

    I’m not sure it was awfully bright of him to overpower the deputy in mid-flight. Not sure even a plane full of hostages is going to help him get away, but your story has me feeling he just couldn’t help himself – which means you told it well. Great job.

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    • Sunshine says:

      … yes, i do believe this young man reacted the only way he knew from his past. changes are hard for some…thank you, Anne. i appreciate your reflections. ❤

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    • Sunshine says:

      it was a challenge this week, i have to admit…but fun at the same time pounding head to the table. 🙂
      eagerly waiting for your next surprise…<3
      thank you.

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  3. Kozo says:

    A little darkness in Sunshine–sunspots. Love the repetition of the title. Love how quickly you set up the characters–text photo to wife, well-built, tattooed, etc. You pro or just writing these stories for fun?

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  4. rommel says:

    You really some uber wild imagination, Sunshine. 😀 That’s my case. I love traveling and I am just tracking my journey. My photos really just come second. Well, I’m glad it is appreciated by many.

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  5. rich says:

    i like that his own words came back to him, but i’m disappointed that the deputy was able to lose his gun so easily. i’m not sure if he really would have released the handcuffs. but then again, i don’t really know much about that process.

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    • Sunshine says:

      i’m not sure about the handcuff release either, but now days with all the no discrimination, no cruelty to whatever laws…i imagine if a person has to go, there must be a law out there that supports letting them go. to the potty. 🙂

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